Title: What if everyone became vegetarian?
Plan:
Purpose: To narrate
Audience: Whaea Tamzin
RT: To include key vocabulary
NL: to narrate
Can you imagine what life would be like if everyone stopped eating meat, if everyone became a vegetarian?
About 100 years ago a deadly disease only made to kill farm animals entered the world.
Nobody knows why, nobody knows how and now because of that everybody became vegetarian.
The problem is that people are having more health issues because they are finding it hard to get enough protein and iron because they are unable to get their hands on any meat products.
Another problem is that we are running out of land to grow crops and chopping down the forests to make more land available is causing climate change and widespread fires.
After a while people came up with alternatives to be able to get enough protein. The humans came up with a new source of protein, they also found out that they could start eating plant based foods.
While the humans were chopping down the forests they discovered a small herd that was resistant to the disease.
The humans soon realised that if you eat too much meat it can cause type 2 diabetes, heart disease, stroke and certain cancers.
Vegetarians are probably healthy but as long as they have a balanced diet.
Kia ora Holly,
ReplyDeleteI really like the idea you used in your writing about a disease killing farm animals so humans have to become vegetarian. I also like the idea that humans discovered plant based products that would help them get enough iron and protein.
I think something you could work on is the ending of your narrative. You have an interesting beginning and middle part of your story, however your ending seems to be lacking. Something I would include for next time is adding more description to your writing.
For example:
- You can describe how humans felt when farm animals started dying.
- Describe how humans felt when they started to run out of land to grow crops.
- Explain how humans discovered the alternatives to get more protein and iron.
- Describe the herd of animals the humans discovered e.g. were the cows?