I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in the Kahikatea hub and my teachers are Whaea Tamzin and Whaea Sharlee. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Great writing Holly, I particularly enjoyed the chocolate lover story. Just a tip, make sure you don't make your sentences too long. Include more commas when needed and full stops.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Great writing Holly, I particularly enjoyed the chocolate lover story.
ReplyDeleteJust a tip, make sure you don't make your sentences too long. Include more commas when needed and full stops.